WTF!? Was that supposed to be deep or something?!

Excuse me for saying
(and even if you don't imma say it anyway cuz that's who i am)
but what the fuck is with... well practically everyone?
I've decided to join a couple of writing sites online, and (despite some of them being infinitely confusing on exactly what is being posted) it seems like it's mainly filth...
Gah, i hate the fucking internet...
I mean, i really hope that i'm not just looking at this through my own shadow,
but i would like to think that i recognize good writing when i see it,
and so far i have yet to see it.
I may be able to attribute most of this to the fact that a lot of the things i see seem to be about a 16 year old paying homage to some relationship partner who dumped their sorry ass because they whined to much.
But still, one would think that amidst all of the madness there might be something that strikes a clearer bell.
I'm so fucking disappointed right now that i can't even concieve going on this train of thought...

but while we're on the subject of writing:
Charlie, i read what you posted on your story, and if this is what we're looking at now then i'm starting to like it. i kinda just scanned most of it (no fault to you; when i look at online articles i mostly just speed read, which is demeaning to your paper) and from what i saw i was pleased.
Minor spelling problems aside (that's why the good lord invented spellcheck on the 4th day) i think something that was distracting was that although your metaphors are very vivid and pleasing, they almost distract away from the storyline itself. But sometimes i like that, and it really will mainly come down to what mood i'm in when i read something. So i really wouldn't advise changing that much
I'm also just gonna stab in the dark here: Guessing we're talking the European front in WW2, and if that's the case it would be nice to know more specifically where in the European front this story is taking place, and this may result in you having to research battles of this war. I'm only saying this because the mood and description of your setting made it seem like the battle was taking place in a well forested area, and i'm not sure how many of those were fought in (purely personal speculation, not so much empirical). So as you progress make sure to further describe setting as well as characters (not that i think you wouldn't; i simply don't have any of your other work to really know how you write).
Anyway, i think i should be heading off to bed. I hope that you managed to weed through the first part of this post and recieved my critique. I will definitely read it through a couple more times to really grasp in, and i look forward to seeing more.

Oh crap; vertigo is setting in. Mos def bedtime.